Well done. Not bad at all. From a storytelling point, I really don't know what he is doing and why he is doing all this. Is he looking at a mirror? Showing his faces to a kid? Is he trying to scare someone? Is he scared? Why is he so sad at be beginning and at the end? Its not clear to me.
Mechanically what I noticed is, its looking quite pose to pose and moving from a pose A to B to C, so on. And when it arrives at a pose it kinda hits an invisible wall and stops. It sucks the life out of your shot. You gotta add some moving holds in there to avoid that. Don't just move from a pose to another and stop. It looks robotic that way. Delay some body parts and let them arrive at the pose later. You wanna make it more organic, right!
Just before the head turn, add a "moving hold antic" in the spine and head. For this, you'll keep the pose in tact and just add a slight moving hold in the opposite direction to create a very micro anticipation just before the head turn. Remember, the anticipation should not be seen in this case, as the head turn is not quick fast action. However, it will really help to sell the action, and will help to maintain the "organic-ness of the move.
At the time of head turn, slow out properly. It looks a bit poppy right now.
Clean up the left shoulder.
Face: Always pay attention to the unity. The face is a one single unit. When the guy smiles, the lower eye lids will be pushed up by the cheek muscles. And in the next pose, when the mouth comes to a normal state, the lower eye lids should relax and come down to a normal state.
I'm attaching a few jpegs... Keep learning.
Good luck.......... -A
Last edited by Amrit Derhgawen; 06-02-2008 at 10:06 AM.